Monday, June 22, 2009
Group 1 Intro Paragraph
What do you like to do in the summer? If the answer includes water, concerts, fairs, or car shows, Minnesota is the place to be. As far as being on the water, Minnesota is The Land of 10, 000 Lakes, need I say more? The Taste of Minnesota and the State Fair both offer great food and outdoor music, along with many other things to see and do. Back to the 50s and Car Craft are two huge car shows held each summer. Whatever your interests, you will more than likely be able to find something to your liking in the hot and humid Minnesota summer.
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I liek this paragraph it would definitly make me want to come to MN! it should be on a brochure or something for vacations! very good job and smooth transtions!
ReplyDeleteI like the opening question. You might want to make the thesis a bit more concise, however. But I do think that you make some good suggestions about things for people to do in Minnesota.
ReplyDeleteThis was a good paragraph. Like Carrissa said, it sounds like it should be in a vacation brochure! so you know it has to be good, haha. You have some great facts and different ideas that are offered here in the great MN. You got it right on the nose in your last sentence with the humid weather.But, you never know, tomorrow may be 50 degrees!
ReplyDeleteI liked your paragraph, but I would elaborate a bit on the state fair or the lakes. It would've been nice to see more information describing the State Fair, but overall you did good work here.
ReplyDeleteI liked your paragraph, but I would elaborate a bit on the state fair or the lakes. It would've been nice to see more information describing the State Fair, but overall you did good work here.
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