Wednesday, June 10, 2009
Alexie paraphrase group one
Although Sherman Alexie read alot of books as a young indian boy, the last thing he thought he was going to be was a writer. Sherman is now trying to save every child's life he can through a story, because he knows the impact a simple book made in his life. Now, he is determined to visit schools and teach creative writing , giving young indian boys hope and determination to become all that they can. The children who have already began writing poems and short stories are already starting to save their own lives and figured out that reading a book can take you to a different aspect of the world. . In the mean time hes not letting the children that have already givin up, demolish his determination to help them. He stands by his words " I am smart. I am arrogant. I am lucky. I am trying to save our lives."
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Interesting stuff...are you paraphrasing his last paragraph here? It's not completely clear.
ReplyDeleteSorry, yes - we were paraphrasing the last paragraph in Alexie.
ReplyDeleteI think it's pretty good. My major suggestion, though, is that you generally don't quote as you are paraphrasing. However, I can see the reason for your quote here: the quote sums up his key message.
ReplyDeleteGroup 1: did you do any work in the Chat room on this at all? I don't see any. Just wondering. Brian
ReplyDeleteNo, we just emailed eachother back and forth. Are we supposed to use the chat? Is it a requirement? I just thought it was a tool that we could use if we wanted.
ReplyDeleteMy preference was that you work things out in the chat room, but e-mail's okay. The reason why I prefer the chat is that it gives me a copy of what students said. Could someone from your group send me a copy of the e-mail conversation you had? Thanks. Brian
ReplyDeleteYou did a good job with paraphrasing the paragraph. I got a good idea of what the story was about just from the paraphrase. It could have used a few more words regarding the children not wanting to learn. I noticed upon reading the original paragraph, that they were much more in depth with this part. To tell you the truth it was well done, and difficult for me to find things to say to help you improve though.
ReplyDeleteI felt that your paraphrasing was accurate and detailed. You seem to be able to pick up on the message of the paragraph quite well. By paraphrasing the conclusion, you are more or less covering the whole story. Be careful with the grammar. I know its not a real big deal in the blogs and discussions, just as long as its not a habit that could carry over to your essays without you realizing it.
ReplyDeleteHey matt4039...which matt are you? We have three of them in this class. :)
ReplyDeletei'm matt dalrymple.
ReplyDeleteI feel that you did a wonderful job summing up the what the writer was trying to put across. Paraphrasing is a great way to get in all in! Wonderful job!
ReplyDeleteJennifer R.
It is a good paraphrase and iteresting how you came up with the idea to do the last paragraph. It does give the general idea of the story. I do agree with some of the other though when it comes to a little bit more detail.
ReplyDeleteYour group did great, you paraphrased what Alexie wrote about in Superman and Me. Great ideas group 1!
ReplyDeleteyour paraphrasing was accurate and detailed. Very Good!! You picked up on the message of the paragraph very well. I agree that when paraphrasing it would be best to leave out quotes, however, that is a very important quote for the reading.
ReplyDeleteGreat work on the paraphrasing. Everything was clear and understandable. I was going to say something about the grammar aspect of it, but since it was already covered by Matt I guess I don't need to anymore.
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