Monday, June 22, 2009
Group 6 conclusion paragraph summer vs. winter fishing
Overall, the differences between fishing in the summer and the winter are varied. In the summer, you use a boat to move around a lake; on the other hand, in the winter you use your friend's beat up truck. In the summer you may find fish are closer to shore due to spawning, whereas in contrast during the winter months they tend to stay in the deeper waters for warmth. Simply catching the fish is different as well. During the summer months you cast out your line or drag it behind you in a boat, while you simply drop the line down a hole in the winter. All you need is the right equipment, knowledge, and technique and you could be on your way to enjoying a fresh caught fish dinner!
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I really liked your conclusion paragraph. You picked an excellent topic and had very great points. I liked the way you organized it, always stating summer first so the reader wouldn't be confused. The incorporation of where fish tend to be during each season was a very important detail that could have easily been overlooked. Nice "Catch!"
ReplyDelete"whereas" and "in contrast" both mean the same thing they way you used them...you probably only need one of these transitions. Similar situation in the first sentence. Saying that the differences are varied is a bit vague and redundant. Your review of the topic sentences would make for interesting paragraphs. I do both kinds of fishing..they are definitely not the same!
ReplyDeleteThis is a great conclusion paragraph in two specific ways. To begin with, I really like your summary here--it's very thorough and detailed. I also like your last sentence a lot. I do think you could spend a bit more topic answering the "So what?" question: why is the topic important and for whom does it matter?
ReplyDeleteI also thought this was a great topic. Your paragraph was very informative and detailed. It kept my attention and interest. Sounds like you know what you are talking about here! I personally have never been fishing but after reading this I think I might give er' a try =)
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ReplyDeleteThis was a nicely written paragraph summarizing how to fish in Minnesota. Anyone who has lived in Minnesota for a while will completely understand your terminology in describing fishing in the State of Minnesota. I found it amusing, great work.
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